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Tell me what you truly think, D.

Post  TheButler on Mon Aug 29, 2011 8:35 pm

Why did you leave?
In my time of need?

I bleed Oh God! how I bleed for you!

But you walk away
Laughing so sweetly
Under your tongue
Is it a silver spoon?
I am wrong.

The things I have ran from
The things you know
Were only done
Because you were there for me

My skin is whiter than the snow
But now it is drenched
With a crimson glow

And my eyes become dizzy
My speech is slow
Can I finish my sentence in a proper manner?
No.

Please stop shouting
It is not helping
Now where was I?
My yes the ending!

To be informed
Of your demise
By a demon
With a smile that melts the skies

How dare you say you know the feeling of being alone!!!

If you want to know the truly hopeless
If you want to feel the need to break
Then look into my watery eyes
And tell me what you truly think!

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Re: Tell me what you truly think, D.

Post  Nepenthe on Wed Sep 14, 2011 5:51 am

What I really think? It's lovely. Lots of imagery and great rhyming.
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Re: Tell me what you truly think, D.

Post  TheButler on Thu Sep 22, 2011 10:16 pm

Nepenthe wrote:What I really think? It's lovely. Lots of imagery and great rhyming.
Thank you but the title was not about the poem it was written in the eyes of another at a time in my life when I found something out to say the least.

I wrote it in the eyes of the victim if the victim was strong enough to confront the person it is shouting to.

Thank you for saying such things. If I could tell you the true story behind it I would but I am afraid I can not, I was sworn to never tell but I wrote this out of spite to be honest.

Good day. Yours sincerely, D.

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Re: Tell me what you truly think, D.

Post  Nepenthe on Wed Sep 28, 2011 8:36 am

TheButler wrote:
Nepenthe wrote:What I really think? It's lovely. Lots of imagery and great rhyming.
Thank you but the title was not about the poem it was written in the eyes of another at a time in my life when I found something out to say the least.

I know. I was just trying to be silly/witty. But yeah, the writing is great.
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